This is the last stage of putting the dissertation together. From Introduction to Conclusion, each section may require some changes. The desired format for the dissertation is outlined in a file sent named “desired format”.One major change is that only quantitative data (questionnaire) was used to gather information. So all attachments which states both qualitative and quantitative data has to change.For each attachment I will state the correction based on what my tutor said. Please again, its not a mixed method of approach for data collection. Only questionnaire, change that once seen in all attachments along with the other corrections mentioned.1. Task 2 attachment- Low number of references provided. Try to justify all arguments made. Also, try not to make assumptions.2. Logic for Choosing Research Topic- Good level of discussion, try to justify the gaps in the literature with references that mention them.3. Task 2 Research aims and Objectives- Good level of discussion, possible rewording of the first objective (to establish) may be helpful.4. Justification of selection of the research approach and design- You could have discussed more ontology and epistemology. Also, a stronger link between the methods chosen and the topic could have been provided. Try to use further text references. You could have included the data collection tool in the appendices.5.Introduction for final paper- You provide a very good level of discussion on the introduction of the thesis. You set very well the background and you highlight the gap (could have provided further text references on the gap to strengthen it more). Clear objectives are provided and the scene is well set for the next chapters.6. Literature Review- Good level of discussion is provided. You make good use of text references and you provide clear arguments. Try to be more critical in the discussion on the literature. However, the research gap is better to be discussed in the introduction part. Try to link the discussion on the literature review with the objectives of the study.7. Research Methodology- You provide discussion in all the important parts of the methodology chapter. However, you could have been more analytical in your discussion, good to see you try to justify. You could have provided further text references to support the arguments that you make. There are a few text references in your work. Also, try to provide a stronger presentation of the chapter.8. Revised results finding- good9.Conclusions- You provide a lengthy discussion on the conclusions. You can write the discussion in a way that highlights more the answers to the objectives of the study. In addition, you provide recommendations, you can go more in depth and also provide recommendations for further research.
