Critique received: The paper has to be analyzing the primary source which is the pictures from the textbook that I sent you. The secondary sources (the ones from JSTOR) have to help to answer the thesis question. The problem with the paper was that it was analyzing the secondary source (Belfast Monthly magazine), it needs to be about the primary source. There also has to be only one thesis question and following the one thesis question a thesis answer after the question. Then the paper would be about explaining that one answer. Also if there was more explanation into the quotations would be better. The quotations need when used.
